Chapter 1: Chance to be a Hero
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By the way, "you" without anything added can also be used as a plural. If you feel "y'all" is still the only one that fits, you can turn it into "you all" to add variety (though it might feel a little weird for some sometimes since "y'all" and "you all" have slightly different uses sometimes, I think)
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I just read through this. Sounds good so far! Where's this all going to lead too? Hmmm, I'll need more before I can venture a guess, otherwise they may be far fetched guesses (no, not the pokemon). For now, I'm just along for the ride 😉.
One edit I noticed you may want to make, in this paragraph:
"Bye," my new companion tells her with a wave. Me and him then leave the Queen, going back down the hall. "So, wanna tell your family what's going on and then meet up at the West exit of the village?"
Me and him could be replaced with "We" or "He and I" if you're going for a distinct separation of the two.
(@Hades0918 is it ok to point out possible edits? I don't want to offend you if I see them. I do like your writings.)
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