Pokémon High School Life part 18
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It is a decent part but could definitely be written a bit more clearer.
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Fair enough…
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No offense, but I could say the same about some of your parts missing punctuation or characters stating the obvious… typically I like how you narrate, but your character voices I often feel leave something to be desired.
Also this is actually my third part!
As for the last part, I do have an issue with that sometimes. I've been trying to work on that… But sometimes it's on purpose, in which you're not exactly meant to know who's speaking. Or it just doesn't matter.2 -
Yes, thank you, I had to go!
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Well I actually do appreciate you letting me know of that, I will try to work on that in future parts.
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Just some constructive criticism thanks for yours about knowing who is saying what!
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To whoever's writing the next part-
Please let me explain Mimi. I don't think she's fully understandable yet just based on this chapter.0 -
I think I'm writing next...?
@Shadow_Sylveon has to be absent for a while, @D0GEZ1LLA hasn't been on much lately (I don't think), and @PokeMom244 said she can't right now (which she could have changed her mind on)
That leaves me, you, and Monsta
Monsta wrote last time, you wrote this one, so it should be me!
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I think you are next.. I should be next but i don't have the time.(I'm so sorry!)
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