Chapter 1 Pokémon chaos
an imposing, white, scaly figure appears from a blinding light.
”Hello there young chosen one… I believe your name is Alison” it says “my name… is Zygarde. I am the being that exists to bring the natural balance of order to the world.” You stand bewildered “But.. why are you here?” You ask
”I…… am trapped, a figment of the being you see me as now, I have chosen you to collect my cells in this cube, and return them to me once you have found all 500 cells. I am trapped in the top floor of the kelpion”
“The kelpion? Isn’t that just a giant statue?”
”it was, until team fell turned it into its evil lair.”
“But…. Why me?”
“Because you are true and pure, you will lead the way, alongside new friends and rivals.” He says, smiling “now go, the world of Pokémon awaits!”
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It's pretty short so I can't think of any advice other than making it longer, but it looks pretty cool.
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I agree with @UnovanZorua with this one it really does feel way to short and seems like it’s an unfinished conversation which would be better if you expanded upon it.
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how I usually think of doing things is thinking ahead what details would I want add what context would be relevant for the current chapter and yet can give a foreshadow of chapters to come how can I build character development If you feel like its too short add an unexpected event a encounter with a new character or just try to spend a few hours writing stuff and just iet your ideas flow into words
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With words XD
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