Time For Vol.4 of our Manga

Been out today

However, last night when trying to sleep I got a good idea for Ange's introduction

So I'm not touching the part before Ange coming to the Hotel

I think that sounded great

You're part with Ange wasn't bad, though

I think it was great just needs more information, which is, of coarse, where I come in

LET'S GOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!

A late-teens female approaches Hotel Z, looking up at the ran down building with disappointment. The trainers powerful enough to destroy me lives in this dump, she thinks, shaking her head as she enters the place.

As she walks in, a bell dings throughout the hotel, signaling her entrance. "I'll meet you at the desk," calls a voice that makes the customer's blood boil.

I know that voice, she thinks, her lips curling into a cruel smile. Taunie walks to the desk, smiling at her. The pink haired girl that helped with my down fall!

"Hello," Taunie exclaims happily as she gets behind the front desk. "Are you wanting to stay at Hotel Z?"

The female nods. "Yes," she responds slowly, like words are new to her. "I want to stay at Hotel Z."

"Great," Tanie exclaims, too excited to notice the strange way the female spoke. "Also, I love your hair! Black with red on the right blue on left is really cute! And the contacts to match really complete the look!"

"O-Oh," the girl stutters, not expecting a compliment. "Thanks. This is natural."

The pink haired employee's eyes widen with surprise. "Really," she asks. "Well that's cool! Anyways, what's your name? Need it for your room."

The heterochomic tilts her head. "You don't recognize me," she asks, mocking a pout when Taunie shakes her. "When you beat somebody as badly as you did me, it is only manners to remember them."

Taunie seems like this makes sense to her, nodding her head. "Ah, you're from the Royale," she says. "Sorry, but I don't pay attention to the people I battle there."

The girl chuckles, shaking her head. "No, no. Not in that," she tells Taunie. "You beat me in something much bigger."

The elevator door pings as it opens. Both females look over and sees Paxton, who's staring at the mysterious customer with fear. "You," he question, much to the girl's pleasure.

There he is, the girl thinks. The one that truly was my destroyer. That one that Zygarde itself chose. Her eyes slightly narrow at him. Paxton!

"You know her," Taunie asks, looking between the two of them. Paxton looks at her, shocked.

"How do you not recognize her," he asks, pointing at the female, who is smiling widely, enjoying Paxton's reaction. "Look at the colors!"

Taunie looks back at the girl, studying her closely. "I mean, yeah the color pallet looks familiar," she mumbles, then sighs. "Can you just tell me your name?"

She looks at Taunie, smiling with fake innocents. "Ange," she replies, relishing how mortified Taunie looks.

'Wh-What," Taunie exclaims, shaking her head. "No! How? W-We beat you! You're a tower! How are you human?"

Ange shrugs. "I'll never say," she says with a smirk, tapping her lips with an index finger. Suddenly, the door slams open, Zygarde 10% standing in the doorway, L close behind.

The black parts of Ange's hair turn purple, her eyes narrowing on the dog. "Hello, mutt," she spats, her voice filed with venom, contradicting her forced smile.

"What is happening," Taunie yells.

Here's part 1!

Looks pretty good if you ask me!

So some of the things you changed are accurate

However, what I learned (maybe this changed, I don't know) is you don't user periods, exclamation marks, question marks, etc when using quotations unless that is the end of the sentence

Also, I made Ange say mutt to disrespect Zygarde but we can keep it how you changed it if you want

Last thing, the venom was rhetorical

She didn't have actual poison

I don't know how to explain the way I used it

I normally see it used when someone is furious

Look up how I used it

Google should tell you

Although, I'm about to edit mine

I forgot one thing

I always forget what they are called!

I use them often